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Teachers (and writers)! Free Class Next Monday on How to Teach Narrative for the Common Core

ByJohn Brown

If you feel a bit lost or anxious about how to teach narrative for the new core, especially stories, I think I can help.

I’m an educator in the private sector and an award-winning novelist and short story writer. I’ve been teaching authors in various venues how to write for the last five years. I’ve been on writing podcasts with thousands of listeners, taught at a number of writers conventions, and had a series of articles published by the national Science Fiction and Fantasy Writers of America organization, an organization for professional authors. I’ve also been helping Nellie, my wonderful wife, teach her 7th and 8th grade language arts students the unit on short stories during that same period. We’ve taught it to twenty different classes and picked up a number of important insights along the way.

This last year I couldn’t help but examine all the materials Nellie brought home during the district’s writing program adoption investigations. Some programs looked very promising; others not so much. Some got some things about writing flat out wrong. Most of the programs had gaps.

Furthermore, because I work with so many people wanting to write, I know that it’s difficult to teach if you really don’t understand what stories really are and how they work. For lots of people, the subject matter can seem impenetrable. And yet writing stories is such a wonderful way to teach writing, especially because so many kids love it. You won’t find a kid who will spend extra hours writing a business letter or poem analysis, but you will find quite a few who will go crazy writing stories. And the whole time they’re practicing their writing skills.

The question is how DO you write a story?

What is a story?

How can you tell if it’s good?

How do you come up with ideas?

Where do you start?

And what the heck is this chart? Do writers really use this? (Not many that I know.)

Story Diagram plot-mountain-pic

And does anyone think changing the diagram to look like Aspen, Colorado actually helps?

Story Diagram Aspen 

Hey, students—please make your story look like Aspen, Colorado!  (Yeah, that’s going to be effective.)

And yet it’s not as difficult as it appears. Nellie and I have seen a lot of kids really get into writing stories. We’ve seen kids WILLINGLY going way beyond the assignment to write stories that are eight, twelve, twenty-five plus pages. And as they’re writing, they’re practicing grammar, spelling, structure, vocabulary, etc. without knowing it and having a great time. I know that if you enable your students, many of them will write, write, write. Especially in grade school. But also in the higher grades.

Stories can be a blast. The assignments can connect to many students. And the results can be wonderful. I’ve laughed out loud at some of the stories coming out of Nellie’s class. Others have been enjoyable on other levels.

But for this to work in your class, you need to know some key things. You need to understand the core of story and the story development process. You need a lesson plan that details everything step-by-step so your students don’t flounder. And you need to know some fundamental tips (secrets?) about teaching this content.

So I’m going to hold this day-long class for you. A full eight hours. And share everything Nellie and I have learned. This class will be for teachers at ALL levels (I’ll show you some ways to scale the complexity of what you’re doing). There will be NO cost. The only thing you have to bring is a pencil, paper, whatever program materials you have, and a willingness to have a good time.

When we finish, you will know how to write a simple story like the ones your students will write because, ta-dum, you will write one! AND you’ll have a step-by-step lesson plan that builds on whatever materials you have—an official program or one of your own. AND you’ll understand story better than 99% of the population. AND you’ll have a bundle of techniques to help your students. AND you’ll solve both world peace and maybe the lost sock conundrum.

Truly, I think that instead of feeling stress, you’ll actually be looking forward to teaching and writing stories with your students. If not, you may bring tomatoes and huck them at me, but please be aware that I will not stand still; to find satisfaction, you will have to be able to hit a moving target.

If you’re interested, just click the Contact John link under my photo in the left sidebar and send me an email letting me know.

Hope to see you in class!

GET READY FOR A FUN DAY OF LEARNING!

Topic: Teaching writing (narrative & the common core)

Who: Teachers (and writers at least 18 years old), seats are limited

When: Monday, July 29th, 8:15 AM – 5:00 PM

Where: Rich Middle School, 54 E 100 S  Laketown, UT 84038

Materials you need to bring:

  • Pencil
  • Paper
  • The writing program you’ll be using this year
  • Kooky socks, for those who cannot resist the urge
  • A lunch or a way to get one

AGENDA

8:15 AM Arrive

8:30 AM – 9:20 AM

  • Can you create a redneck crapper?
  • The 1st secret to teaching writing: Attributes & techniques
  • The 5 parts of story
  • Thieves prosper – using existing patterns
  • A car, a beggar, and an idiot — basic pattern 1

9:30 AM – 10:20 AM

  • The 2nd secret to teaching writing: Do it with them
  • Technique: Sketch then draft
  • Workshop 1: Zombies and kisses
  • Technique: Zing hunting
  • Workshop 2: Hunt zing

10:30 – 11:20

  • What makes a story big or small
  • Workshop 3: Select a right-sized THOM and character
  • Workshop 4: Select a Goal
  • Workshop 5: Make character sympathetic
  • Workshop 6: 3 tries
  • Workshop 7: Resolution

LUNCH

12:00 – 12:50

  • The 3rd secret to teaching writing: Cognitive modeling and the 6-step process
  • The 4th secret to teaching writing: Our tiny brains
  • Writing is telling: Narrative & description
  • Technique: Yes, SiR
  • Technique: Broad-brush + 1
  • Technique: The Pause

1:00 – 1:50

  • The 5th secret to teaching writing: Have fun
  • Workshop 8: Write your story

2:00  – 2:50

  • How the pros revise—concept, line, & copy
  • Workshop 9: Content edit
  • The 6th secret to teaching writing: Our brains are still tiny
  • Workshop 10: Line edit

3:00 – 3:50

  • The 7th secret to teaching writing: The 3 grunts (responding to a story and grading)
  • Share stories
  • What the heck did we just do?

4:00 – 4:50

  • How to adjust for grade level
  • Common core
  • Your program and lesson plan
  • Identify black holes
  • Wrap up & next steps
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    . . . .

    What’s my point? That self-publishing is both exciting in its possibilities and daunting in its requirements. And that very few businesses succeed, whether it’s a new shoe shop, or a convenience store, or a restaurant, or a software start-up…or a publishing company. But it’s more possible now to succeed than at any point in the past. I’m living proof.

     

    Link to the rest at Russell Blake’s Author Myths-1, Author Myths-2, and Author Myths -3.

    Blake has some of the most sensible advice I’ve read. If you want more, search for him over on KindleBoards.

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    Four days ago I was on my hands and knees in the garden, muttering, “My ring. Where is it? Where is it!” 

    I could have been Bilbo out there among the tomatoes. I could have been Gollum—though I’d have to endure a long, worm-filled diet to play that role convincingly. 

    I’ve been married thirty-six years to a good woman. You’d think a wedding ring is just a ring. 

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    Someone memed me Boromir holding up the ring on a chain and saying, “It is a strange fate that we should suffer so much fear and doubt over so small a thing.” 

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    For two days I searched the ground where I’d lost it—a long hedge of tomatoes and the sagebrush hill behind where I’d tossed split fruit. For two nights I went to bed feeling the absence on my hand, as if something vital had been taken from me. 

    Then, with the help of a Garrett ACE 250 metal detector I rented from a fine establishment in Logan, Utah, I found it. 

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    My precious. My precious, precious reminder of thirty-six years with my admirable wife and our four wonderful daughters. It feels so good to have it back on my finger. 

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    On another note, many of you have asked about GLORY, the fourth book in the Dark God series. It’s next in the queue. I’ll write that climax as soon as I finish ASSASSIN. I already have an opening, a rough outline, and plenty of notes—dogmen, dreadmen, Glories—the works. It’s coming, and I think the revelation of what’s really happening will surprise you. 

    Finally, I’m not dead yet, nor am I the fount of all wisdom, but I can say this: spend time with those you love, laugh with them, go on adventures. Because one day you’ll lose your ring—or some other small token bound up with all of it—and know exactly how precious those memories are. 

    Peace out, my fellow dreadmen and fell maidens. 

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  • Curse of a Dark God draft 2 finished!!!!

    ByJohn Brown

    Rejoice! Sing! The draft is done!

    Hallelujah.

    Based on my records I spent:

    • 48.5 hours on the pre-draft for this book
    • 503.5 hours to finish draft 1
    • 130 hours to finish draft 2
    • A total of 682 hours of work to this point

    If I’d been working full time on this that would be roughly 17 weeks. That’s about 4 months. I don’t think that’s so bad, considering this book clocks in at 230,000 words. Not bad at all. But no wonder just finishing a novel is the thing that filters most would-be writers out. That’s a freaking huge amount of time. I hope as things progress I get faster.

    Here’s what I focused on in this draft.

    • Sugar’s story. It was a mess and the biggest problem with draft 1. I had to rewrite or massively revise about a dozen of her chapters. In fact, I ended up added three chapters to her story: White Tower, Withers, and Loyalties. I’m very please, however, with the result. I think it works very well.
    • The Gnolum. I had purposely left the seeding chapters for these giants out (seeding as in I can’t just have them show up at the end without laying some groundwork). I had to add 2 chapters for them to this draft.
    • Early Argoth chapters. The first two chapter of Argoth’s story needed to be totally rewritten. The second needed major revising.
    • Chapter titles. For titles in draft 1 I used the name of the main pov character in the chapter and a short summary of what was happening. It helps keep things clear. So those are now out and the chapter titles in.
    • Rough stuff. In many of the early chapters I was still feeling my way into the story. Yes, I had an outline, but I just can’t get the whole story until I begin to write. So there were many chapters with notes to myself or blanks to fill in. Some things no longer worked because of later chapters. All this I had to fix.
    • Reordering chapters in the last half of the book. About halfway through the book Talen’s story breaks off from Sugar’s and Argoth’s. So when I was originally writing them, I found it easier to just write all of Talen’s story and then all of Sugars and Argoth’s until the three met up again. Well, this created some time gaps. I fixed those. I also had long stretches of one pov. For example, I had Talen’s story running for 14  chapters without any break to the other viewpoints. All this had to be fixed.

    So I’m very pleased with this draft. Here are the first three chapters for your enjoyment: CODG draft 2 beginning for readers. Remember: feedback from my wife, agent, editors, and other early readers will change it. You’re welcome to contact me with any comments you might have about it.

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  1. Thank you for doing these classes. I just wanted to know if the class will be like your previous classes and posted online. Thank you again for giving so much.

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