Here’s the latest version of the book description that will accompany the book on the various sites and on the back cover of the trade paperback. It’s purpose is to advertise: to let folks know the feel of the book and pique their interest.
A young man.
The girl he is hunting for using the dark and terrifying magic of Slethery.
And the monster who only wants to be free.
So begins the towering fantasy series that introduces an elaborate new world, a multifaceted system of magic, and a cast of compelling characters and creatures.
Trapped in a web of lies and ancient secrets, of right becoming wrong, the three must struggle not only against each other, but also a being of irresistible powers. A creature who is gathering her servants to oversee the impending human harvest.
If the three win, they will save those they love the most. If they fail, the clans of the land fall with them.
What people are saying:
~ Best Novel of the Year Whitney Awards, speculative fiction
~ Engrossing Publishers Weekly
~ Provocative Booklist
~ Starred Review! Library Journal
~ A great setting, a smart story Brandon Sanderson
Do you think you can do better? See anything to cut? Have some book descriptions you think work really well? If so, comment. I’d love to see what you come up with.
Consider clobbering the “to be” verbs: The girl he hunts using the dark blah blah. A creature who gathers blah blah.
Otherwise: Nice!
To be or not to be–you don’t like to be? 🙂
Thanks, Dale.
A young man with a past he never knew to outrun.
The girl he must seek through the dark and terrifying magic of Slethery.
And the monster who only wants to be free.
Trapped in a web of lies and ancient secrets, of right becoming wrong, the three must struggle not only against each other, but also a being of irresistible powers. A creature who is gathering her servants to oversee the impending human harvest.
If they succeed, they will save those they love the most. If they fail, the world itself may fall with them.
So begins the towering fantasy series that introduces an elaborate new world, a cast of compelling characters, and a deep, grim magic from the heart of darkness.
Etc.
Just a thought.
I would go with ‘Sleth magic’ instead of ‘magic of Slethery’
David and Davis,
Good stuff. Thanks!
The girl he is hunting for using the dark and terrifying magic of Slethery.
He is hunting with the magic, or he is hunting because of her using magic?
I read the book a few years back, but I can’t remember the details enough to fix the ambiguity.
Good feedback, Andrew.